My article was not only rejected within few hours of submission, but my account was suspended, as well. I request you people to help me what went wrong, and why I wasn't given a second chance to re-submit?
The article:
"Water is essential for regulating body functions. The studies have not been able to provide satisfactory answers regarding the amount of water a person must consume in a day. The requirement for water differs from person to person, and the activity level, health and the climatic conditions.
Water makes up for 70% of body weight, and it is essential for the smooth functioning of various organs of the body. Dehydration, a medical condition, occur due to lack of water in the body. Dehydration results, in fatigue and drain of energy.
A body loses water through breathing, respiring, urine and bowel movement. The person must consume enough water to compensate for loss of due to metabolic process. An average adult loses approximately 2 liters of water through urine, and another liter or so occurs due to metabolic activities like sweating and bowel movement. The foods replenish approximately 25% of water and thus, the individual needs to consume more than 1 liter to make up for remaining 75% of water loss.
The color of urine can help to determine if the water intake is sufficient for the body, if the urine is colorless or slightly yellowish it means the water is sufficient."
This covers 1/3 or article, Please help me if there is error. I am confused.
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Hasina
Please help!! I appreciate in advance.
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Did you write this article or "borrow" it from elsewhere? Instant suspension is usually for either really bad work or stolen work.
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I'm not sure that the text was "borrowed," but the article does have some fundamental problems. The following examples give us some clues:
Dehydration, a medical condition, occurs due to insufficient water in the body. Dehydration can lead to fatigue and a loss of energy. It can also be fatal.
The above sentence is a run-on sentence. It needs to be simplified.
The color of urine can help determine if water intake is sufficient for the body, ***** period.**** If the urine is colorless or slightly yellowish ****comma***, it means the water is sufficient. *** (awkward - the water is sufficient for what? Water intake appears to be sufficient???
The color of urine provides clues. If urine is colorless or slightly yellow, it indicates that the body is well hydrated; if not, it could be a sign of dehydration.
Also, the reasons listed aren't "parallel. " In the original text, breathing and respiring are both verbs while urine is a noun and bowel movement is most likely a noun but I'm not completely sure of that
. You could also say "by breathing, respiring (perspiring), urinating, or moving bowels/having a bowel movement" which would be more parallel.)
-- A body loses water through breathing, perspiring, urinating, and having bowel movements." Similarly, you could say, "A body loses water from respiration, perspiration, urination, and ______ evacuation? (Not sure of the right phrase for bowel movements, but see how each of the words match each other as far as structure goes?
When CC encounters multiple errors or awkward turns of phrases that don't sound natural to an English speaking audience, it may decide that the writer's skills aren't up to its standards. Unfortunately, this looks like what happened here. As unfortunate as it is, I understand why CC might have decided to pass on future submissions. Keep learning and improving. English is tricky with so many nuances, rules, and rules-that-contradict-the-other-rules.
Dehydration, a medical condition, occur ****s**** due to *** article needed ---> (a lack of/ an absence of)**** lack of water in the body. Dehydration results, *comma not needed* in fatigue and **** a loss of energy*** drain of energy. **** ----- Also, since it can kill, it's probably smart to mention that. For example:Dehydration, a medical condition, occur due to lack of water in the body. Dehydration results, in fatigue and drain of energy.
Dehydration, a medical condition, occurs due to insufficient water in the body. Dehydration can lead to fatigue and a loss of energy. It can also be fatal.
"The color of urine can help to determine if the water intake is sufficient for the body, if the urine is colorless or slightly yellowish it means the water is sufficient.
The above sentence is a run-on sentence. It needs to be simplified.
The color of urine can help determine if water intake is sufficient for the body, ***** period.**** If the urine is colorless or slightly yellowish ****comma***, it means the water is sufficient. *** (awkward - the water is sufficient for what? Water intake appears to be sufficient???
The color of urine provides clues. If urine is colorless or slightly yellow, it indicates that the body is well hydrated; if not, it could be a sign of dehydration.
The above is another example that doesn't make sense. "A body loses water through breathing and "respiring"" --- do you mean "perspiring" or "perspiration"? If you mean "respiring" (which means breathing in and out), then that's the same thing as breathing which is redundant. If you mean "perspiring" (which means sweating), then you chose the wrong word to describe your thought. In either case, the wrong word was used, causing either redundancy or confusion.A body loses water through breathing, respiring, urine and bowel movement.
Also, the reasons listed aren't "parallel. " In the original text, breathing and respiring are both verbs while urine is a noun and bowel movement is most likely a noun but I'm not completely sure of that
. You could also say "by breathing, respiring (perspiring), urinating, or moving bowels/having a bowel movement" which would be more parallel.) -- A body loses water through breathing, perspiring, urinating, and having bowel movements." Similarly, you could say, "A body loses water from respiration, perspiration, urination, and ______ evacuation? (Not sure of the right phrase for bowel movements, but see how each of the words match each other as far as structure goes?
When CC encounters multiple errors or awkward turns of phrases that don't sound natural to an English speaking audience, it may decide that the writer's skills aren't up to its standards. Unfortunately, this looks like what happened here. As unfortunate as it is, I understand why CC might have decided to pass on future submissions. Keep learning and improving. English is tricky with so many nuances, rules, and rules-that-contradict-the-other-rules.