Rejection of The King and Mrs. Simpson

[clkottke]

My article, The King and Mrs. Simpson, was rejection for the following reason:
This article needs revised for clarity, word choice, and commas.
Is it possible for me to get some specifics where I need to change it?

Thank you for any input. I want my articles to be the "best" and when they are rejected that means I need to improve.

Cheryl

[Ed]

Okay. Bear with me. I don't have the article in front of me, so I'll have to generalize, and not all may be accurate.

It seemed as though, going from the first couple of paragraphs, that the examples given lacked regimented cohesiveness . . . there seemed to be loose connections made, and I couldn't really follow why some of the information was given. It seemed almost that you were trying to include too much information (some relevant, some not), and it got out of hand. I can't remember the sentence exactly, but the sentence in the second paragraph that ended something like "well educated" was awkwardly constructed and could have been worded more clearly, as could some other sentences.

I'd have to see the article again in order to give specifics.

This probably doesn't help much, and may even confuse you more - if so, I apologize.

Thanks,
Ed

[clkottke]

You didn't confuse me, it makes sense.
Thanks! I will redo it and try resubmitting.