Help me with my Grammar please, just once :(

[rosepup]

Hello CC world,

I am new here, also new at writing serious articles. My article on fresh juice was rejected a while back on grammatical grounds. Am more of a poetess, so it might have taken toll on my grammar during the course of time.

Now my problem is I don’t have anyone to help me rectify. No friends, no teachers in touch. I solely depend on you whom I call ‘caring reading eyes’. Please help me. Kindly point a few of the mistakes and I’ll try to pick the rest of them based on your pointers. This will help me improve. I have re-written the article, twice! But, since rejections lead to ejection here, am scared to submit again. Please help me grow Celeste, Hayley, Barry, Ed …anyone?

Waiting to thank you for your time and kindness.

Summer Rose
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First paragraph of the rejected article.

Welcome Fresh Juice in Your Daily Diet.

Fresh fruit and vegetable juice has always been recommended as vital diet supplement, for healthier lifestyle, by doctors and dietitians around the globe. An average American spends approximately $1 a day on iron, vitamin or other health supplements. It is not a healthy way of life, as it may imbalance the biological clock in the long run. For good health, there is no substitute to natural living. That is why fresh juice comes into the pitcher on the dining table. Juice not only tastes delightfully better than expensive pills and tonics, it also helps keep diseases at bay by overhauling and strengthening the immune system. Being a rich source of vitamins, minerals, enzymes and natural sugar, there’s more to juice than just being cool and colorful.
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[Celeste Stewart]

The paragraph is a bit awkward and some of it doesn't make sense. Here are a few suggestions that caught my eye:

Fresh fruit and vegetable juice has *** have** always been recommended as vital diet *dietary* supplement*s* >> no comma> , for healthier lifestyle*s*, by doctors and dietitians around the globe. An *The* average American spends approximately $1 a day on iron, vitamin*s* or *and* other health supplements. It *Relying on supplements* is not a healthy way of life >> no comma>>, as it *doing so* may imbalance the biological clock <<<< this doesn't make sense. How do supplements affect a person's biological clock?>>> in the long run. For good health, there is no substitute to *for* natural living. That is why fresh juice comes into the pitcher <<< again, sentence doesn't make sense>> on the dining table. Juice not only tastes delightfully better than expensive pills and tonics, it also helps keep diseases at bay by overhauling and strengthening the immune system. Being *As* a rich source of vitamins, minerals, enzymes and natural sugar, there’s more to juice than *its refreshing flavor and colorful appearance.* just being cool and colorful.

[TmBlades]

I've been getting some help from a free proofreading service called "puffread". Proofreaders will read your articles for free, and give you some grammatical suggestions. I've been using this to help me learn a little bit, since I'm also having problems with approval. : )

There's some nice paid services too, such as article doctor. However, if your article doesn't sell you will be out money this way.

[HayleyWriter]

Hi,

If you want more help, feel free to send me the article by cutting and pasting it into an email through the CC system (contact this author button). I'll be happy to give you further pointers and advice.

Hayley