I'm a little frustrated, so maybe that's why I don't see it. I submitted an article and received a rejection. In the rejection, it had this sentence from my article. I know I can rearrange the sentence, or even delete it, but can someone point out my error so I can correct it next time?
After eating fatty food, the gallbladder releases bile into the small intestines where it is excreted from the body.
Help me fix this sentence
Moderators: Celeste Stewart, Ed
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This sentence implies the gallbladder has eaten fatty food.
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I understand it's not the gallbladder that's eaten the fatty food; but I'm not sure what's excreted from the body -- the food or the bile. Also, maybe instead of "where it is excreted" should read "after which it is excreted".After eating fatty food, the gallbladder releases bile into the small intestines where it is excreted from the body.
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Great point.
" . . . intestines, which excrete (what) from the body."
" . . . intestines, which excrete (what) from the body."
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jeeez, damn, now I totally see it. :-/
Thank you both.
Thank you both.
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For anyone interested, the following page on dangling modifiers may be helpful:
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/597/01/
http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/597/01/
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Thank you for the link.
After you pointed it out, I completely see it. I think I'm gonna take a break from CC and writing for a couple of days. I feel dumb not seeing it , which suggests I need sleep. I was pretty proud of that article, and I love the health stuff, but I really hate making dumb mistakes like that. My dog will appreciate the fresh air with her momma.
Thank you again!
After you pointed it out, I completely see it. I think I'm gonna take a break from CC and writing for a couple of days. I feel dumb not seeing it , which suggests I need sleep. I was pretty proud of that article, and I love the health stuff, but I really hate making dumb mistakes like that. My dog will appreciate the fresh air with her momma.
Thank you again!