Sexist?

[thereasonyoucome]

Ok, so they reviewed my second article. They accepted my first submission yesterday, without any order to revise it, and I was really happy about that! But I just received a message that the second article has been rejected because it's inappropriate. Well, I believe their term was sexist. Maybe it was? I didn't really think so when I wrote it. Any thoughts? Here's the statement in question:

"Most importantly, she knows the power she wields over men. She's privy to a fact that a lot of women seem oblivious to; women can render men powerless. She knows this, and she uses it fully to her advantage. She knows that if she looks at her man with come-hither eyes and pouty lips, seducing him in the subtlest of ways, she'll get what she wants. She'll ask for her wish to be fulfilled, and her wish will be his command."

They bolded the word "pouty."

I wrote that for the "sugar daddy dating" public request.

I'm a little confused. On one hand, I'm thinking, "Maybe it is sexist?" On the other hand, it's not really. I don't know.

So they said I can resubmit as long as I make revisions. Should I resubmit? See, I'm scared now of writing anything about sex. Maybe I should just stay away from the topic of sex when writing for Constant Content.

Hmmm. Any thoughts? Thank you!

[JStone]

That could definitely be seen as sexist. It has nothing to do with mentioning sex (as far as I know), and more to do with the tone and wording being (potentially) offensive to women. But that's just my POV...I've no idea if that's why it's been rejected.

[Celeste Stewart]

Hmmn, it's hard to tell without the full context of the article. And it's tough because the intended site is a sugar daddy site

Maybe it's because the text lumps all women into this persona and presents opinion as fact? Can you tweak it so that the description doesn't collectively describe women in this manner? Maybe creating a character?

"For example, Veronica is a 20-something single woman who knows the power she wields over men. Unlike many women, she believes that women can render men powerless. She's so sure of this that she constantly uses her powers of seduction to her advantage. With confidence, Veronica looks at her man with come-hither eyes and pouty lips, seducing him in the subtlest of ways and getting what she wants. She'll ask for her wish to be fulfilled, and her wish will be his command."

By the way, "pouty lips" seems appropriate for a sugar daddy site in my opinion - just make sure its use doesn't objectify women. I think if you create a character, it would be okay. Also, since we can't really create fiction, if you use an approach like the one above, you'll need to introduce that part somehow. Not sure how to do it or even if it fits into your article.

[AndrewMich]

It is very creative and well written. I really enjoy the word usage and flow as well, terrific job! However it appears limiting in the sence of who will read it then take it seriously. My good friend composed an opinion essay on "Male empowerment and the female role". Despite being well written and on point, he crossed THAT line and failed the assignment. The professor was a male, who claimed it was "limiting and offensive to both genders". A good suggestion, should the guidelines permit would be to add some humor and keep it a touch lighter.

Best of luck on your resubmission, your writing is great!


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AM